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If I were to have a debate on the subject. I would gather base data. Youtube has lots of data about it. There was a TV show about using cell phone while driving. If a driver uses a cell phone, his reaction takes longer than if he doesn't use it. The majority of cars have handsfree system. So, drivers don't need to control cell phones while driving. My opinion is that, drivers allow to access cell phones as much as the car has functions.

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If I were to have a debate on the subject. I would gather base data. 
>> If I were to have a debate on the subject, I would gather basic data.

Youtube has lots of data about it. 
>> CORRECT

There was a TV show about using cell phone while driving. 
>> There was a TV show about the dangers of using a cell phone while driving.

If a driver uses a cell phone, his reaction takes longer than if he doesn't use it. 
>>If a driver uses a cell phone, their reaction time is longer compared to when they don't use it.

The majority of cars have handsfree system. 
>> CORRECT

So, drivers don't need to control cell phones while driving. 
>> Drivers should refrain from using cell phones while driving.

My opinion is that, drivers allow to access cell phones as much as the car has functions.
>> In my opinion, drivers should be allowed to access cell phones to the extent that the car has functions.
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