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What do you think your midlife crisis will be like?

작성자: 이*윤
2024-06-06 762

회원님의 영작문



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it got longer as I used it.
check the attached file.
In Korea, today is a holiday! have a nice Thursday!

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yun!
I guess I went through this when I turned thirty; I was depressed and felt empty and unfulfilled. However, I soon understood that this possible crisis is only in our heads. Thus, it's critical to control our mental input. To avoid depression or feeling as though we are going through a crisis, we need to remain clear-headed and free of worries and negativity. 
Chammy

Well, just thinking about it makes me feel embarrassed and dizzlied. 

>>Well, just thinking about it makes me feel embarrassed and dizzied. 

First of all, there can be many crisises in the midlife.

>>First of all, there can be many crisis in the midlife.

First, it's an economic cirsis.

>> First, it's an economic crisis.

At the middle age, the time of retirement may be approaching or retired, but it may be difficult to live without the money saved at that time.

>> In middle age, the time of retirement may be approaching or retired, but it may be difficult to live without the money saved at that time.

In Korea, there is a system called pension, but the money you receive every month may not be enough to do economic activities.

>>In Korea, there is a system called a pension, but the money you receive every month may not be enough to do economic activities.

That may create a situation where you have to keep working and makes you feel deep depression.

>> That may create a situation where you have to keep working and make you feel deeply depressed.

I'm saving steadily to prevent such a situation.

Second, it's an emotional crisis.

The first crisis, the economic crisis, may lead to this.

When a situation arises where you don't work, it takes quite a lot of time to accept it, and sometimes you can't accept it.

You will compare yourself to others who are not economically active, you will have self-negative feelings, and you will perceive yourself as useless.

>>Correct

The you can fall into a deep sense of depression and loss and become dangerous.

>>Then you can fall into a deep sense of depression and loss and become dangerous.

Third, it's a matter of health.

It's a crisis that middle-aged people in Korea have the most.

When you're young, you don't know you're working, but when you retire, you're the first to realize the problem.

Also, it's the most common problem these days because people are not living a healthy life from eating habits.

I'm also caring about it the most and taking care of my parents too.

 >>Correct


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