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What do you like to do with your free time? Do you prefer to relax or to be active?

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I prefer to relax these days. I like using my phone in the bed. But if I have much energy, I try other hobbies. In last winter, I got nothing to do after Sooneung. So I tried some activities. I tried making miniature, reading books, doing some yoga, cooking and power english class. And I also make something to do if I feel my energy is enough even when it's not a vacation such as signing up for the swimming class! So the conclusion is, it depends on how much energy I have. If the energy is enough, I try something new but if not, I'm just lying in my bed.

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Hello, Seong Eun!
Thanks for writing your homework.
Your motivation is really inspiring. Keep it up! 
Have a great day! See you on our next class. ^^
-T.Jhozel 
I prefer to relax these days. 
>> Correct!
OR: These days, I'd rather just relax. 
I like using my phone in the bed. 
>> Correct!
OR: I like to use my phone while lying down. 
But if I have much energy, I try other hobbies. 
>> Correct!
OR: However, if I have a lot of energy, I try other hobbies. 
In last winter, I got nothing to do after Sooneung. 
>> Correct!
OR: Last winter, after Sooneung, I had nothing to do. 
So I tried some activities. I tried making miniature, reading books, doing some yoga, cooking and power english class. 
>> Correct!
OR: So I tried a few activities. I tried making miniatures, reading books, practicing yoga, cooking, and taking a class at Power English.
And I also make something to do if I feel my energy is enough even when it's not a vacation such as signing up for the swimming class! 
>> Correct!
OR: And even when it's not a vacation, I find something to do if I feel like I have enough energy, such as signing up for a swimming class! 
So the conclusion is, it depends on how much energy I have. 
>> Correct!
OR: So, the answer is that it depends on how much energy I have. 
If the energy is enough, I try something new but if not, I'm just lying in my bed.
>> Correct!
OR: If I have enough energy, I try something new; otherwise, I just lie in bed.
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