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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages and disadvantages of being nocturnal?

In my opinion, night owl people have more disadvantages than advantages.
Normal people work during the evening and afternoon and sleep at night.
But nocturnal people live the opposite way.
And these people overeating unhealthy food in the night.
This is why I think these life-style way it will have a bad effect on their health.
Unfortunate that in my country is there are many teenagers have nocturnal patterns.
This is because they have to go to school in the morning and go to the academy in the evening to study.
And, there are many students who sleep at school because they don't have enough sleep time.
That's why I think nocturnal life-style it's not good for our health.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages and disadvantages of being nocturnal?


In my opinion, night owl people have more disadvantages than advantages.
>> In my opinion, being a night owl has more disadvantages than advantages.
Normal people work during the evening and afternoon and sleep at night.
>> CORRECT!
But nocturnal people live the opposite way.
>> CORRECT!
And these people overeating unhealthy food in the night.
>> And these people overeat unhealthy food at night.
This is why I think these life-style way it will have a bad effect on their health.
>> This is why I think this kind of lifestyle will have a bad effect on their health.
Unfortunate that in my country is there are many teenagers have nocturnal patterns.
>> It's unfortunate that in my country there are many teenagers who have nocturnal patterns.
This is because they have to go to school in the morning and go to the academy in the evening to study.
>> CORRECT!
And, there are many students who sleep at school because they don't have enough sleep time.
>> And, there are many students who sleep at school because they don't have enough sleep.
That's why I think nocturnal life-style it's not good for our health.
>> That's why I think having a nocturnal lifestyle is not good for our health.

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