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No, I am not afraid of going on scary park rides but if it's very scary so my brother is scared I am afraid.
No, I haven't seen anybody who hurt themselevs in an amusement park

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Hi Sunny!
I'm glad you took the time to express yourself today.
This composition is so light.
It's so easy to understand.
You did well in giving the correct words and expressions.
Really good job.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
No, I am not afraid of going on scary park rides but if it's very scary so my brother is scared I am afraid.
>> No, I am not afraid of going on scary park rides but if they are very scary, my brother gets scared and then I also feel afraid.
No, I haven't seen anybody who hurt themselevs in an amusement park
>> No, I haven't seen anybody who hurt themselves in an amusement park.
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