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How do we stop the idea that people with disabilities should be pitied and instead see them as equal

작성자: 이*윤
2024-06-04 321

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Well, but to be honest, I also felt pitied for people with disabilities and thought they were different from ordinary people.
But I don't think so now.
To tell you from my experience, I think school education is important.
School education changes the perception of people with disabilities.
I once did volunterr in a place where people with disabilities were present, as I volunteered, I felt that I was equal to ordinary people.
Furthermore, I realized that ordinary people like us can become people with disabilities due to accidental accidents or ohter reasons.
Since then, I have tried to help people with disabilities first and try not to focus on the special stories of people with disabilities.
Each person may have a special story, but if I focus on that story, I first felt pitied.
And many people have to remove all the bad prejudices about them.
It will be the easiest and most difficult, but the attempt to try will have to continue.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yun!
You've said it well in your composition, which I appreciate. Rather than feeling sorry for them, it would be more beneficial to support and encourage them, showing them that even in their circumstances, there is a better world out there and that they are just like everyone else. It doesn't mean we can't do anything because we have disabilities, nor does it mean that we are limited in what we can do. 
Chammy

Well, but to be honest, I also felt pitied for people with disabilities and thought they were different from ordinary people.
>>Well, to be honest, I also felt pity for people with disabilities and thought they were different from ordinary people.
But I don't think so now.
To tell you from my experience, I think school education is important.
School education changes the perception of people with disabilities.
>>Correct
I once did volunterr in a place where people with disabilities were present, as I volunteered, I felt that I was equal to ordinary people
>>I once did volunteer in a place where people with disabilities were present, as I volunteered, I felt that I was equal to ordinary people
Furthermore, I realized that ordinary people like us can become people with disabilities due to accidental accidents or ohter reasons
>Furthermore, I realized that ordinary people like us may become people with disabilities due to accidental accidents or other reasons
Since then, I have tried to help people with disabilities first and try not to focus on the special stories of people with disabilities.
>>Correct
Each person may have a special story, but if I focus on that story, I first felt pitied.
>>Each person may have a special story, but if I focus on that story, I first feel pitied.
And many people have to remove all the bad prejudices about them.
It will be the easiest and most difficult, but the attempt to try will have to continue.
>>Correct
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