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The crime will often occur in the future like thesedays.
But the sort of it will be different.
The crime which people face to face will decrease.
Cyber fraud will increase.
The scale of crime will be serious .
Fortunately. Developed science will resolve the accidents.
But the result of crime will caused suicides and revenues to society

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Hello, Ms. Sunny!
Thank you for expressing your thoughts about this homework. Yes, I agree with you. Crime will occur a lot more in the future. Many people these days are grumpy and they easily get irritated which may lead to crime. I hope that in the future people will become more understanding and would try to ignore petty things.
T. Aki~

The crime will often occur in the future like thesedays.
>>> Crime will often occur in the future like these days.

But the sort of it will be different.
>>> CORRECT!

The crime which people face to face will decrease.
>>> Personal encounter crimes will decrease.

Cyber fraud will increase.
>>> But cyber fraud will increase.

The scale of crime will be serious.
>>> CORRECT!

Fortunately. Developed science will resolve the accidents.
>>> Fortunately. developed technology will resolve the accidents.

But the result of crime will caused suicides and revenues to society
>>> But the result of crime will cause suicides and revenues to society

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