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Social network's positive thing is sharing what i've been up to with my friends. We can't hang out each other because so busy but we can easily see their lives through social network. And I can say hello to friends I haven't seen for a long time.

On the other hands, There're so many fake news in social network. Some creators wants to make money from their contents so, they makes that easily to be blinded. It's really bad for minors.

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Hi, 

Thanks for sharing your views about social media. This is such a really great topic to discuss.


-Teacher Ash



Social network's positive thing is sharing what i've been up to with my friends.

>>One positive aspect of social networks is sharing what I¡¯ve been up to with my friends.


We can't hang out each other because so busy but we can easily see their lives through social network.

>> We can¡¯t hang out with each other because we are so busy, but we can easily see each other¡¯s lives through social networks.


And I can say hello to friends I haven't seen for a long time.

>>Additionally, I can easily catch up with friends that I haven¡¯t seen for a long time.


On the other hands, There're so many fake news in social network.

>>On the other hand, there is plenty of fake news on social media.


Some creators wants to make money from their contents so, they makes that easily to be blinded.

>>Some creators want to make money from their content, so they create it in a way that easily deceives people.


It's really bad for minors.

>>This is particularly harmful to minors.


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