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HOMEWORK :

1. I grew up in Jinju, a local city in Korea.
I lived there until I was 33 years old. And I live in Gimhae because of my job 8 years ago. Gimhae is an hour away from Jinju.

2. I just arrived home five hours ago. And I did home training for an hour right away. After that, I studied English until video English.

3. I'm not excited to go out. It's better to stay home

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Hello, Steve! Wow, it sounds like you've had quite the journey from Jinju to Gimhae! It must be interesting to experience life in different places. Your dedication to home training and studying English is impressive. Sometimes staying in and relaxing can be just what you need. Enjoy your time at home!
~ Teacher Maxine

I grew up in Jinju, a local city in Korea.
>> CORRECT

I lived there until I was 33 years old. And I live in Gimhae because of my job 8 years ago. 
>> I lived there until I was 33 years old, and I have been living in Gimhae for the past 8 years due to my job.

Gimhae is an hour away from Jinju.
>> CORRECT

I just arrived home five hours ago. And I did home training for an hour right away. 
>> I arrived home five hours ago and immediately did some home training for an hour.

After that, I studied English until video English.
>> After that, I studied English, including watching English videos.

I'm not excited to go out. It's better to stay home
>> I'm not excited about going out. It's better to stay home.

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