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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are some problems people have right after a natural disaster?

The natural disaster can destroy our families, health, and property.
So we prepare in advance to reduce and prevent the damage.
Nevertheless, it's hard to win nature.
That's why we sometimes face unexpected situations.
For example, I think heavy rain and floods are the most common disasters.
The biggest problem of flood is hygiene issue.
If we survive the flood, will be face another disaster after the flood.
A lot of areas, it's hard to get clean water because flood.
And, when we have hurt and injured from flooding, the injury can be go to bad.
This is because the flood water is contaminated water.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are some problems people have right after a natural disaster?


The natural disaster can destroy our families, health, and property.
>> Natural disasters can destroy our families, health, and property.
So we prepare in advance to reduce and prevent the damage.
>> CORRECT!
Nevertheless, it's hard to win nature.
>> Nevertheless, it's hard to win over nature.
That's why we sometimes face unexpected situations.
>> CORRECT!
For example, I think heavy rain and floods are the most common disasters.
>> CORRECT!
The biggest problem of flood is hygiene issue.
>> Hygiene issues are the biggest problems due to the flood.
If we survive the flood, will be face another disaster after the flood.
>> If we survive the flood, will can face another disaster after the flood.
A lot of areas, it's hard to get clean water because flood.
>> A lot of areas have a hard ttime getting clean water because of flood.
And, when we have hurt and injured from flooding, the injury can be go to bad.
>> And, when we get hurt or injured from the flood, the injury can be worse.
This is because the flood water is a contaminated water.
>> CORRECT!

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