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In 3~5 sentences, answer the question below:
>> What are the things you hardly ever do? Write at least two and explain why.

I hardly ever eat and walk fast.
I think they are just my habits.
I¡¯m naturally as slow as a sloth.

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                       What are the things you hardly ever do? Write at least two and explain why.


I hardly ever eat and walk fast.
>> OR: Eating and walking fast are some of the things I seldom do. 

I think they are just my habits.
>> OR: I suppose they became my habits. 

I¡¯m naturally as slow as a sloth.
>> OR: Some might even call me a sloth because of such habits. 

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