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Would you consider hiring a housekeeper to do chores for you ?

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In Korea, in the past, the middle and upper classes hired maids, and the maids lived in the employer's home.
However, these days, it is not common to hire maids to do chores.
The reason is that labor costs are too high and most people live in apartments, making it difficult for maids to live with them, and home appliances to help with chores are well-equipped, so the need to hire maids has decreased.
However, it is known that some of the highest-ranking people still hire housekeepers.
Also, elderly people with limited mobility hire housekeepers, who do not live with them but only visit briefly a day to help them.
Currently, I have no intention of hiring a housekeeper because I can do the chores myself, but when I get older and have difficulty moving, I plan to hire a helper who will visit me occasionally to cook and do housework.
In Korea, unlike in the past, older people do not live with their children.
So I will need a helper when I get older and have difficulty moving around.

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Happy Monday, Sun!

A professional cleaning service can take care of the cleaning tasks, giving you more time to focus on other important tasks and activities. Not only does this reduce your stress levels, but it also helps you maintain a better work-life balance.

- Kristine ^^ 

In Korea, in the past, the middle and upper classes hired maids, and the maids lived in the employer's home.
>> In the past, maids were employed by the middle and upper classes in Korea, and they resided in their employers' homes.
However, these days, it is not common to hire maids to do chores.
>> However, hiring maids to handle chores is not very common these days.
The reason is that labor costs are too high and most people live in apartments, making it difficult for maids to live with them, and home appliances to help with chores are well-equipped, so the need to hire maids has decreased.
>> The reason is that hiring maids has become less necessary due to high labor costs, the fact that most people live in apartments which makes it difficult for maids to live with them, and the advancement of well-equipped home equipment.
However, it is known that some of the highest-ranking people still hire housekeepers.
>> Correct.
Also, elderly people with limited mobility hire housekeepers, who do not live with them but only visit briefly a day to help them.
>> Correct.
Currently, I have no intention of hiring a housekeeper because I can do the chores myself, but when I get older and have difficulty moving, I plan to hire a helper who will visit me occasionally to cook and do housework.
>> I can handle the housework myself, so I don't plan to employ a housekeeper right now. However, when I get older and find it difficult to move, I want to hire a helper who will come visit me occasionally to help with cooking and housework.
In Korea, unlike in the past, older people do not live with their children.
>> In Korea, elderly people don't reside with children as they did in the past.
So I will need a helper when I get older and have difficulty moving around.
>> Therefore, when I get older and have trouble moving around, I might need assistance.

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