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Do you think you are getting more patient or impatient as you get older ?

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I absolutely think I'm becoming more patient as I get older.
People are progressive when they are young, but become conservative as they get older.
This is because as they get older, it becomes more difficult to acquire new things, so they become more interested in maintaining what they have.
In my case, when I was young, I lacked experience and had nothing, so I think I was progressive and reckless.
Also, I tried various things and succeeded, but I also experienced failure and frustration.
However, it wasn't a problem because I was young and had enough time to make up for my failures.
However, as I get older, I feel that I am becoming more patient.
Based on the many experiences I have had throughout my life, I think carefully and decide when doing something.
This is because once I fail, it is difficult to make up for it as the end of my career is approaching.
I now understand why older people are becoming more conservative.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Friday, Sun!

Impatience has its roots in frustration. It's a feeling of rising stress that starts when you feel that your needs and wishes are being ignored. In a modern environment where we're accustomed to instant communication and immediate access to data, it's a growing problem.

- Kristine ^^ 

I absolutely think I'm becoming more patient as I get older.
>> Correct.
People are progressive when they are young, but become conservative as they get older.
>> Correct.
This is because as they get older, it becomes more difficult to acquire new things, so they become more interested in maintaining what they have.
>> This is a result of their growing desire in preserving what they already have as they age and find it harder to acquire new things.
In my case, when I was young, I lacked experience and had nothing, so I think I was progressive and reckless.
>> Since I had nothing and no experience when I was younger, I believe that I was aggressive and careless.
Also, I tried various things and succeeded, but I also experienced failure and frustration.
>> In addition, I made a lot of attempts and was successful in some of them, but I also failed and got frustrated.
However, it wasn't a problem because I was young and had enough time to make up for my failures.
>> Correct.
However, as I get older, I feel that I am becoming more patient.
>> Correct.
Based on the many experiences I have had throughout my life, I think carefully and decide when doing something.
>> Based on the many experiences I have had throughout my life, I think carefully and make decisions when doing something.
This is because once I fail, it is difficult to make up for it as the end of my career is approaching.
>> Correct.
I now understand why older people are becoming more conservative.
>> I'm now aware why the older generation is turning conservative.
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