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I think they are many beautiful building around my house
The city Hall, Brisbane Square and etc..
They have nice outside of buildings.
Actually, my house is on the hill. And there are Free roof bus.
So I can go my house easily when I had lots of baggies
It¡¯s a little danger when late in the evening. I can¡¯t walk at the outside alone. Because there are many homeless and here is city,, maybe..?
But cause here is city, there are many shopping center!
If I get a job, I wanna shopping near here.
I thought about I can¡¯t be feel of nature in the city more than other place, But I changed my think. This place is also great.

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Hi Su, 

Thanks for sharing about your city. You did a very good job describing it. Well don! ^^

-Teacher Ash

I think they are many beautiful building around my house

>> I think there are many beautiful buildings around my house.

The city Hall, Brisbane Square and etc..

>> The city Hall, Brisbane Square and etc. are some of those buildings. 

They have nice outside of buildings.

>> The buildings have nice designs. 

Actually, my house is on the hill.

>> CORRECT

 And there are Free roof bus.

>> We also have free bus service. 

So I can go my house easily when I had lots of baggies

>> So, I can go home easily especially when carrying lots of baggies. 

It¡¯s a little danger when late in the evening.

>> However, it¡¯s a little dangerous outside in the evening. 

 I can¡¯t walk at the outside alone.

>> I can¡¯t walk outside alone

 Because there are many homeless and here is city,, maybe..?

>> Maybe because of the number of homeless people in the city.

But cause here is city, there are many shopping center!

>> There are also many shopping centers. 

If I get a job, I wanna shopping near here.

>> If I get a job, I want to shop around the area. 

I thought about I can¡¯t be feel of nature in the city more than other place, But I changed my think.

>> I thought I won¡¯t be able to live close to nature because I live in the city. However, I changed my mind. 

 This place is also great.

>> CORRECT

OR >> I think this place is also great.


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