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What is the most attractive personality trait a person can have?

작성자: 박*호
2024-05-22 346

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It is not the difficulty of work that people have in the company, but the relationship between colleagues.
When there are a lot of people gathered, there are some people who are very selfish and some people who have a rough personality.
Also, some people are close to each other and some people don't like it.
They compete with each other and bully certain people.
These things make it difficult for people living in groups.
Therefore, it seems that un selfish people who put the interests of the organization ahead of personal interests, are welcomed.
In addition, the first person to help a friend in need and the person who is open and lively to brighten the atmosphere of the meeting are also attractive.
I have listed several attractive personalities, but I think it is very difficult to have those personalities.
Because people are inherently selfish and want to be proud and put their own interests first.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good afternoon, Sun!

Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up!

- Kristine ^^ 

It is not the difficulty of work that people have in the company, but the relationship between colleagues.
>> The relationships among colleagues are more important to employees than the challenges they face at work.
When there are a lot of people gathered, there are some people who are very selfish and some people who have a rough personality.
>> Some people are incredibly greedy and some people have a rude demeanor when a large number of people are together.
Also, some people are close to each other and some people don't like it.
>> Furthermore, some people get along well with each other, while others don't.
They compete with each other and bully certain people.
>> Correct.
These things make it difficult for people living in groups.
>> Correct.
Therefore, it seems that un selfish people who put the interests of the organization ahead of personal interests, are welcomed.
>> Therefore, it seems that unselfish people who put the interests of the organization ahead of their personal interests are welcomed.
In addition, the first person to help a friend in need and the person who is open and lively to brighten the atmosphere of the meeting are also attractive.
>> Additionally, the first person to lend a helping hand to a friend in need and the person who brings energy and openness to the group are equally attractive.
I have listed several attractive personalities, but I think it is very difficult to have those personalities.
>> I believe it is really difficult to have those attractive personalities I have described.
Because people are inherently selfish and want to be proud and put their own interests first.
>> Because people are inherently selfish and want to be proud, they put their own interests first.
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