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When i was high school, i used to enjoy chatting online.
In chatting, my song's upload and than some people like my song.
I used to usually song by r&b pop song.

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Hello Dan,
Thank you for doing your homework every day.
Don't be afraid to speak out your thoughts, because you will be able to develop yor skills if you keep using the English language.
Have a wonderful day!
T. Aki~

When I was high school, I used to enjoy chatting online.
>>> When I was in high school, I used to enjoy chatting online.
  
In chatting, my song's upload and than some people like my song.
>>> In chatting, I upload my songs, and then some people like my song.

I used to usually song by r&b pop song.
>>>  I used to sing R&B pop songs often.
>>>  I used to play R&B pop songs often.
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