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In 3~5 sentences, answer the question below:
>> What's your thought on tipping waiters at restaurants or the tipping culture in Western countries?

The tipping culture is very awkward to me.
I haven¡¯t paid tip ever.
Because I haven¡¯t gone the Western countries.
Anyway I think that the tipping culture in Western countries can be existed as a paying culture in the other countries.

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           What's your thought on tipping waiters at restaurants or the tipping culture in Western countries?


The tipping culture is very awkward to me.
>> The tipping practice puts me in an awkward position. 

I haven¡¯t paid tip ever. Because I haven¡¯t gone the Western countries.
>> I haven't given a tip ever because I haven¡¯t gone to Western countries.

Anyway I think that the tipping culture in Western countries can be existed as a paying culture in the other countries.
>> Anyway, I think the tipping practice in Western countries is equivalent to paying the bill in other countries. 
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