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In 3~5 sentences, answer the question below:
>> What's your thought on tipping waiters at restaurants or the tipping culture in Western countries?

The tipping culture is very awkward to me.
I haven¡¯t paid tip ever.
Because I haven¡¯t gone the Western countries.
Anyway I think that the tipping culture in Western countries can be existed as a paying culture in the other countries.

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Here's your revised composition. Many thanks for sending it. Please go through the corrections, such as combining two sentences that you separated. Remember, it's better to avoid starting your sentence with the word 'because'. Speak to you soon!


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           What's your thought on tipping waiters at restaurants or the tipping culture in Western countries?


The tipping culture is very awkward to me.
>> The tipping practice puts me in an awkward position. 

I haven¡¯t paid tip ever. Because I haven¡¯t gone the Western countries.
>> I haven't given a tip ever because I haven¡¯t gone to Western countries.

Anyway I think that the tipping culture in Western countries can be existed as a paying culture in the other countries.
>> Anyway, I think the tipping practice in Western countries is equivalent to paying the bill in other countries. 
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