¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

howework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÇÑ*¿¬
2024-05-20 479

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Dear Chammy,
I traveled to Osaka and arrived late on Sunday so I was late to submit my homework.
Regarding my religion, I trusted Buda when I was young living with my grandmother, and now I am a Christian, believing in Jesus.
I have tried to believe in only Jesus, but sometimes think there are many other religions in our lives and many people believe other religions.
Many churches teach God is only One.
So, I try to go to church every Sunday and listen to the address.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello, Ms. Mi Yeon!
Hearing that you had a good time on your trip to Osaka made me glad ^___^ I hope there will be another family trip to come ~
Regarding the topic in question, I believe that as we get older, it is reasonable to be conscious of and aware of our religious inclinations. When we were younger, we followed our parents' religious beliefs, but as we grew older, we began to form our own opinions about religion and began to change. I believe it should be acceptable to choose one's faith freely. :))
Chammy
Dear Chammy,
I traveled to Osaka and arrived late on Sunday so I was late to submit my homework.
>>Correct
Regarding my religion, I trusted Buda when I was young living with my grandmother, and now I am a Christian, believing in Jesus.
>>Regarding my religion, I trusted Buda when I was young living with my grandmother, now I am a Christian, believing in Jesus.
I have tried to believe in only Jesus, but sometimes think there are many other religions in our lives and many people believe other religions.
>> I have tried to believe in only Jesus, but sometimes think there are many other religions in our lives and many people believe in other religions.
or
>> I have made an effort to believe in Jesus alone, but occasionally I feel like there are many different religions in society and that many people follow them.
Many churches teach God is only One.
>>Correct
So, I try to go to church every Sunday and listen to the address.
or
>>I so make an effort to attend church every Sunday and pay attention to the sermon.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
139246 Homework ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-18 1
139245 What do you need to prepare when doing a presentation? Áø*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-18 1
139244 homework ½É*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-08-18 1
139243 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-08-18 2
139242 0818 writing task ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-18 5
139241 Homework ¾È*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-08-17 6
139240 homrwork day6 ¹Ú*¾Ö ¿Ï·á 2024-08-17 3
139239 How do you balance relaxation and responsibilities while at home? ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-08-17 351
139238 Homework ÀÌ*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 2
139237 What is the best part of your childhood? ½Å*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 381
139236 The most scaring insect ¹Ú*ÀÌ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 322
139235 Fanfic of Harry Potter ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 376
139234 homework ÀÌ*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 381
139233 2024.08.16 ¾ç*À² ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 363
139232 In order to look good is the most important working out. ÀÌ*¸§ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 310
139231 Science subjects that I\'ve learned in school ¹Ú*ÀÌ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 385
139230 16.Aug.2024 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 1
139229 2024.08.15 ³²*·Ê ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 397
139228 If you could have the perfect birthday party, what would it be? ÀÌ*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 350
139227 What do you think of the sound and smell of rain? ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-08-16 341

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04