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Dear Chammy,
I traveled to Osaka and arrived late on Sunday so I was late to submit my homework.
Regarding my religion, I trusted Buda when I was young living with my grandmother, and now I am a Christian, believing in Jesus.
I have tried to believe in only Jesus, but sometimes think there are many other religions in our lives and many people believe other religions.
Many churches teach God is only One.
So, I try to go to church every Sunday and listen to the address.

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Hello, Ms. Mi Yeon!
Hearing that you had a good time on your trip to Osaka made me glad ^___^ I hope there will be another family trip to come ~
Regarding the topic in question, I believe that as we get older, it is reasonable to be conscious of and aware of our religious inclinations. When we were younger, we followed our parents' religious beliefs, but as we grew older, we began to form our own opinions about religion and began to change. I believe it should be acceptable to choose one's faith freely. :))
Chammy
Dear Chammy,
I traveled to Osaka and arrived late on Sunday so I was late to submit my homework.
>>Correct
Regarding my religion, I trusted Buda when I was young living with my grandmother, and now I am a Christian, believing in Jesus.
>>Regarding my religion, I trusted Buda when I was young living with my grandmother, now I am a Christian, believing in Jesus.
I have tried to believe in only Jesus, but sometimes think there are many other religions in our lives and many people believe other religions.
>> I have tried to believe in only Jesus, but sometimes think there are many other religions in our lives and many people believe in other religions.
or
>> I have made an effort to believe in Jesus alone, but occasionally I feel like there are many different religions in society and that many people follow them.
Many churches teach God is only One.
>>Correct
So, I try to go to church every Sunday and listen to the address.
or
>>I so make an effort to attend church every Sunday and pay attention to the sermon.
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