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Why do you think many Koreans hate your country\'s president?

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I think many Koreans hate our president, the reason is following;
First, he is very friendly to Japan.
Second, he don't communicate with the people.
Third, Korean president is not peaceful with North Korea.

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Hi there, Jimmy!

Here's your corrected essay from last week's homework. Please take a look at the corrections and alternative sentences given below. See you soon!


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Jean~~




                  Why do you think many Koreans hate your country's president?


I think many Koreans hate our president, the reason is following;
>> I think many Koreans hate our president, the reasons are the following:
>> OR: The reasons that many Koreans hate our president are the following: 

First, he is very friendly to Japan.
>> CORRECT~~

Second, he don't communicate with the people.
>> Second, he doesn't communicate with the people.

Third, Korean president is not peaceful with North Korea.
>> Third, the Korean president is not peaceful with North Korea.
>> OR: Third, the Korean president is not friendly to North Korea.
>> OR: Third, the Korean president does not want to maintain peace with North Korea.

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