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When should I stop communicating with someone?

작성자: 이*윤
2024-05-17 648

회원님의 영작문

Well, in three situations, I think we should stop communicating.
First, when someone is in a state of intense emotion.
When someone is deep feelings of one thing, they should stop communication.
For example, for someone who is going through a situation where someone is injured and killed, you have to stop communicating.
Because if peopel feel overflowing emotions, people can't communicate easily.
Second, when someone is in very angry state.
Because angry people tend to get excited, even a small word or small behavior can cause different and difficult situations.
So someone can't communicate when someone are very angry.
Third, when someone has a seriously biased idea.
people with seriously biased ideas are not easily persuaded because they think everything they have is right, and they can argue that they are right while communicating.
That's why the right communication may not proceed.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yun!
I appreciate how you provided three scenarios in your responses today regarding when to put down a conversation. I assumed you gave your thoughts careful attention. ^_^
Chammy 
Well, in three situations, I think we should stop communicating.
OR
>> There are three circumstances in which we should stop communication.
First, when someone is in a state of intense emotion.
When someone is deep feelings of one thing, they should stop communication.
>> When someone has deep feelings about one thing, they should stop communication.
OR
>>Someone should cut off communication when they are experiencing strong emotions about anything.
For example, for someone who is going through a situation where someone is injured and killed, you have to stop communicating.
>>Correct
Because if peopel feel overflowing emotions, people can't communicate easily.
>>Because if people feel overflowing emotions, people can't communicate easily.
Second, when someone is in very angry state.
Because angry people tend to get excited, even a small word or small behavior can cause different and difficult situations.
So someone can't communicate when someone are very angry.
>>So someone can't communicate when someone is very angry.
Third, when someone has a seriously biased idea.
people with seriously biased ideas are not easily persuaded because they think everything they have is right, and they can argue that they are right while communicating.
That's why the right communication may not proceed.
>>Correct
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