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Is a college education worth it? Are you Pro or Con?

작성자: 김*경
2024-05-15 937

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I am for a college education because it can be worthwhile investing money and time of youth on the premise that it can be revamped with student-oriented approach because I have to acknowledge that many colleges in Korea still have many problems to improve to get worldly competition, such as hierarchy in class, laziness and negligence of some tenured professors. If colleges in Korea try to improve its weakness on their own, I believe that there is still value for students to pay for university.

Conversely, if it fails to revamp its old-fashioned structure and should be rebuilt by influences outside. It’s not worth money and time because education resources outside colleges have already entered the education main scene, posing a doubt on high school students if the amount of money for colleges is worthwhile or not. I think Korean universities are now at an important crossroads to distrust or trust on the value of college education.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Steve!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I completely understand where you're coming from. A college education can indeed be a valuable investment if it adapts to a more student-oriented approach and addresses existing issues. 
Great job expressing your opinion! ^^
~ Teacher Maxine 

I am for a college education because it can be worthwhile investing money and time of youth on the premise that it can be revamped with student-oriented approach because I have to acknowledge that many colleges in Korea still have many problems to improve to get worldly competition, such as hierarchy in class, laziness and negligence of some tenured professors. 
>> I am for college education because it can be worthwhile to invest the money and time of youth, provided it can be revamped with a student-oriented approach because I have to acknowledge that many colleges in Korea still have many problems to improve to compete globally, such as class hierarchy and the laziness and negligence of some tenured professors.

If colleges in Korea try to improve its weakness on their own, I believe that there is still value for students to pay for university.
>> If colleges in Korea work to improve their weaknesses on their own, I believe that there is still value for students to pay for university.

Conversely, if it fails to revamp its old-fashioned structure and should be rebuilt by influences outside. It’s not worth money and time because education resources outside colleges have already entered the education main scene, posing a doubt on high school students if the amount of money for colleges is worthwhile or not. 
>> Conversely, if they fail to revamp their old-fashioned structure and need to be rebuilt by outside influences, it’s not worth the money and time. Education resources outside colleges have already entered the main scene, causing high school students to doubt whether the amount of money for college is worthwhile.

I think Korean universities are now at an important crossroads to distrust or trust on the value of college education.
>> I think Korean universities are now at an important crossroads regarding trust in the value of college education.

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