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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do you think some people become vegetarians?

There are many various people in the world and we try to understand their opinion.
One of them is vegan(vegetarians).
Theses days, more and more people are follow vegan diets way.
They said that why they follow the vegan diets that for animal, environmental protection and their body's health.
Actually, reality is that we don't care if they follow something special diets or not.
But, a few aggressive vegetarians are ruin the public sentiment.
Because they force their opinions on others.
For example, they complain why this restaurant doesn't have a vegan menu, or they enter in to a food store or butcher's shop and they do protest performance.
That's why many people who don't following vegan, don't like aggressive vegan's people.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why do you think some people become vegetarians?


There are many various people in the world and we try to understand their opinion.
>> CORRECT!
One of them is vegan(vegetarians).
>> One of them is a vegan (vegetarians).
Theses days, more and more people are follow vegan diets way.
>> Theses days, more and more people follow the vegan diet.
They said that why they follow the vegan diets that for animal, environmental protection and their body's health.
>> They asked why do they follow the vegan diet, and they said it's for animal and environmental protection, and for their body's health.
Actually, reality is that we don't care if they follow something special diets or not.
>> Actually, reality is that we don't care if they follow some special diets or not.
But, a few aggressive vegetarians are ruin the public sentiment.
>> But, a few aggressive vegetarians ruin the public sentiment.
Because they force their opinions on others.
>> That's because they force their opinions on others.
For example, they complain why this restaurant doesn't have a vegan menu, or they enter in to a food store or butcher's shop and they do protest performance.
>> For example, they complain why this restaurant doesn't have a vegan menu, or they enter in a food store or butcher shop and they do a protest.
That's why many people who don't following vegan, don't like aggressive vegan's people.
>> That's why many people don't want to be a vegan, because they don't like aggressive vegans.

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