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Do you often watch TV? What programs do you like to watch?

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Yes, I do
I like to watch "Talkpawon 25hour" and " A head of police investigation 1958"
"Talkpawon 25hour" is a program that introduces and travels to mmany countries.
"A head of police investigations 1958" is a criminal drama in the 1960s.

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I'm sending you your corrected essay. Please check the alternative expressions and corrections. Note that we don't titles of television, movies, and radio shows don't need quotation marks, but they are italicized. Titles of a single episode are enclosed in quotation marks. 
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                             Do you often watch TV? What programs do you like to watch?



Yes, I do
>> OR: Sure, I do. 

I like to watch "Talkpawon 25hour" and " A head of police investigation 1958"
>> I like to Talk Pawon 25 O'Clock and Chief Detective 1958. 

"Talkpawon 25hour" is a program that introduces and travels to mmany countries.
>> Talk Pawon 25 O'Clock is a program that introduces and travels to many countries.

"A head of police investigations 1958" is a criminal drama in the 1960s.
>> Whereas Chief Detective 1958 is a crime investigation drama in the 1960s.

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