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Do you think children should be encouraged to specialize in one sport from a young age? Why or why n

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I think it is very good for children to start playing sports from a young age.
However, I have two opinions about whether it is advisable to focus on one specific sport from an early age.
First of all, I think that if children want to pursue sports as a career in the future, it is better to focus on one sport. This is because in order to succeed as a sports player, they must receive professional training from an early age and achieve good results in various competitions.
Next, I think that children who play sports as a hobby rather than a job need to experience a variety of sports rather than just one sport.
This is because sports are good for health and play a important role in social life.
I think that if they can play a variety of sports, both indoor and outdoor, depending on the season, it will be very helpful in making friends in various fields and forming a network.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good evening, Sun! 

Sports help in improving the physical, mental, and social well-being. Parents should encourage their kids to take up any kind of sports that is most suited to them in terms of their interest level. By engaging in physical activities, you can make your kid active both physically and mentally.

- Kristine ^^

I think it is very good for children to start playing sports from a young age.
>> I think it is very good for children to start playing sports at a young age.
However, I have two opinions about whether it is advisable to focus on one specific sport from an early age.
>> Correct.
First of all, I think that if children want to pursue sports as a career in the future, it is better to focus on one sport.
>> Correct.
This is because in order to succeed as a sports player, they must receive professional training from an early age and achieve good results in various competitions.
>> Correct.
Or >> This is due to the fact that they need to start receiving professional training at a young age and perform well in a variety of activities in order to excel as sports players.
Next, I think that children who play sports as a hobby rather than a job need to experience a variety of sports rather than just one sport.
>> Correct.
This is because sports are good for health and play a important role in social life.
>> It's because sports are good for health and play an important role in social life.
I think that if they can play a variety of sports, both indoor and outdoor, depending on the season, it will be very helpful in making friends in various fields and forming a network.
>> In my opinion, it will be very beneficial for them to play an array of indoor and outdoor sports, depending on the season, as it will help them create a network and make friends in a variety of fields.
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