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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you know about life in London?

Actually, I don't know well about life in London.
Because, I just went to London for a trip.
Nevertheless, there is a reason why I want to go to London this chance.
During traveling in London, I met a few Koreans living in London.
And I asked to them a question about the pros and cons of life in London.
They said in common pros, the high wages and treatment of workers are more good compared to Korea.
It's because, if I want spend vacation in Korea company, I have to take a uncomfortable situation.
But, in generally western countries companies don't touch personal privacy and vacations.
But, I think there are many cons.
Among the disadvantage, they said to me, UK recently leave the European union and prices gone very high.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What do you know about life in London?


Actually, I don't know well about life in London.
>> Actually, I don't know the life in London that well.
Because, I just went to London for a trip.
>> CORRECT!
Nevertheless, there is a reason why I want to go to London this chance.
>> CORRECT!
During traveling in London, I met a few Koreans living in London.
>> During my trip to London, I met a few Koreans living in London.
And I asked to them a question about the pros and cons of life in London.
>> And I asked them questions about the pros and cons of living in London.
They said in common pros, the high wages and treatment of workers are more good compared to Korea.
>> They said in common pros, the high wages and treatment of workers are more better  compared to Korea.
It's because, if I want spend vacation in Korea company, I have to take a uncomfortable situation.
>> It's because, if I want to go on a vacation as a worker in a Korean company, I have to take an uncomfortable situation.
But, in generally western countries companies don't touch personal privacy and vacations.
>> But, generally, companies in western countries don't touch personal privacy and vacations.
But, I think there are many cons.
>> CORRECT!
Among the disadvantage, they said to me, the UK recently leave the European union and prices gone very high.
>> Among the disadvantage, they said to me, the UK recently leave the European union and prices have gone too high.
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