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Q: What do you think is the purpose of music?
A: I think it was for entertainment before, but I think it's purpose is to change people's mood.
Before, there were some orchestras, and other groups to play music, and I think it was for some occasions, or entertainment.
But for now, usually people listen to music when they want to change their mood.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some notes:

1. I think it was for entertainment before, but I think it's purpose is to change people's mood.
>>I think it was for entertainment before, but now I think its purpose is to change people's mood.

2. Before, there were some orchestras, and other groups to play music, and I think it was for some occasions, or entertainment.
>>Before, there were some orchestras and other groups that play music for some occasions, or for entertainment.

3. But for now, usually people listen to music when they want to change their mood.
>>For now, people usually listen to music when they want to change their mood.

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