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Do you think that History subject is important to us or not?

작성자: 김*경
2024-05-13 157

회원님의 영작문

We can understand the present fully in the light of studying history. History can look or sound tedious or old-fashioned to study at school where high-tech subject already entered the main scene. But the importance of history is getting more important in this rapid-changing society because history can give us meaningful hint to predict the future in fast-shifting period.

Principal questions about history asks us as follows: who were, are, will be we? where did we come from? Where are we to go? what have been our inherent strength or weaknesses? These questions help us understand what to opt or focus our strength or resources on in the future. For practical benefits from history. we need to comprehend or focus on the background behind historical events, and we likewise need to try to personalize or embody them, making a specific plan to develop our life with lessons from history instead of self-satisfaction with academic knowledge which doesn't do us any good.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Steve!
Your answer provides a clear and concise reflection on the significance of studying history in today's dynamic society. While effectively posing thought-provoking questions about our past, present, and future, it could benefit from clearer organization into smaller paragraphs. You may enrich your points with examples for how individuals can apply historical knowledge practically in their lives. Overall, it was a great and thought-provoking response. Keep it up!
~ Teacher Maxine

We can understand the present fully in the light of studying history. 
>> CORRECT

History can look or sound tedious or old-fashioned to study at school where high-tech subject already entered the main scene. 
>> CORRECT

But the importance of history is getting more important in this rapid-changing society because history can give us meaningful hint to predict the future in fast-shifting period.
>> But the importance of history is becoming more significant in this rapidly changing society because history can give us meaningful hints to predict the future in fast-shifting periods.

Principal questions about history asks us as follows: who were, are, will be we? where did we come from? Where are we to go? what have been our inherent strength or weaknesses? 
>> The principal questions about history ask us as follows: who were we, who are we, who will we be? Where did we come from? Where are we going? What have been our inherent strengths or weaknesses?

These questions help us understand what to opt or focus our strength or resources on in the future. 
>> CORRECT

For practical benefits from history. we need to comprehend or focus on the background behind historical events, and we likewise need to try to personalize or embody them, making a specific plan to develop our life with lessons from history instead of self-satisfaction with academic knowledge which doesn't do us any good.
>> For practical benefits from history, we need to comprehend or focus on the background behind historical events. We likewise need to try to personalize or embody them, making a specific plan to develop our lives with lessons from history instead of deriving self-satisfaction from academic knowledge, which doesn't serve us well.
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