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What is your favorite season and why?

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Winter is my favorite season, There are several reasons why it is.
First, I don't like a hot weather and I like cool weather. Because cool weather makes me feel light.
Second, During winter, We don't need to consider that What to wear.
When we go outside in Winter, We always have to wear a long jacket for cold weather.
In the winter, I don't like something.
The snowy weather is very dangerous. When we drive a car in the snow road, Car is very slips.
So, be careful while Driveing a car in the winter season. Because Car accident need a lot of money.

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Hi, Jun! Thank you so much for doing your homework. You did a wonderful job. Please take note of the corrections I made on your sentences. Keep it up and see you in class! ^^
-T. Julia
Winter is my favorite season.
>> Correct 
There are several reasons why it is.
>> Correct
First, I don't like a hot weather and I like cool weather.
>> First, I don't like hot weather, and I like cool weather.
Because cool weather makes me feel light.
>> Correct
Second, During winter, We don't need to consider that What to wear.
>> Second, during the winter, we don't need to consider what to wear.
When we go outside in Winter, We always have to wear a long jacket for cold weather.
>> When we go outside in winter, we always have to wear a long jacket for the cold weather.
In the winter, I don't like something.
>> Correct
The snowy weather is very dangerous.
>> Correct 
When we drive a car in the snow road, Car is very slips.
>> When we travel on a snowy road, the car slips.
So, be careful while Driveing a car in the winter season. Because Car accident need a lot of money.
>> So, be careful while driving a car in the winter season because car accidents cost a lot of money.
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