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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you try to conserve water? In what ways do you save water?

Yes, my country also doing ways for save water.
And the government and many companies actively promote it.
Save water in our daily, we are doing ways such as reducing take a shower time and when we doing laundry, all at once.
In addition, we use various ways to save water and resources.
In fact, water charges and electric charges in South Korea are not expensive compare to other countries.
But, water and electric charges risen too much in recent years.
So many people feel a lot of pressure and we are reducing more trivial waste and spend somethings.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you try to conserve water? In what ways do you save water?


Yes, my country also doing ways for save water.
>> Yes, in my country, we also do some ways to save water.
And the government and many companies actively promote it.
>> Many companies, as well as the government, actively promote it.
Save water in our daily, we are doing ways such as reducing take a shower time and when we doing laundry, all at once.
>> We save water daily, by doing different ways such as reducing the time in taking a shower and doing laundry all at once.
In addition, we use various ways to save water and resources.
>> CORRECT!
In fact, water charges and electric charges in South Korea are not expensive compared to other countries.
>> CORRECT!
But, water and electric charges risen too much in recent years.
>> But, water and electric charges have drastically increased in the recent years.
So many people feel a lot of pressure, and we are reducing more trivial waste and spend somethings.
>> So many people feel a lot of pressure, so we reduce more trivial wastes and spend on some things.
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