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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why are many people afraid of multiculturalism?

Nowadays Korea is also getting used to be a multicultural society.
It's because the number of mixed-blood, immigrant, and foreign workers increased a lot compared to the past.
But, a lot of number of people still don't like multiculturalism society.
It's because there are problem between immigrants and natives.
Typically problem are religious and cultural differences.
And, I think many natives people has conservative ideas.
That's because most natives don't like changes.
For example, South Korea has freedom of religions, but many people actually don't like it Islamic religion and cultural.
And the topic in Korea these days is Islam.
But there is a difference in culture that is unfamiliar with them, so there is a problem every time.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why are many people afraid of multiculturalism?


Nowadays Korea is also getting used to be a multicultural society.
>> CORRECT!
It's because the number of mixed-bloods, immigrants, and foreign workers increased a lot compared to the past.
>> CORRECT!
But, a lot of number of people still don't like multiculturalism society.
>> But, a lot of people still don't like multicultural society.
It's because there are problems between immigrants and natives.
>> CORRECT!
Typically problem are religious and cultural differences.
>> The most typical problems are religious and cultural differences.
And, I think many natives people has conservative ideas.
>> And, I think many natives have conservative ideas.
That's because most natives don't like changes.
>> CORRECT!
For example, South Korea has freedom of religions, but many people actually don't like it Islamic religion and cultural.
>> For example, South Korea has freedom of religions, but many people actually don't like Islamic religion and culture.
And the topic in Korea these days is Islam.
>> CORRECT!
But there is a difference in culture that is unfamiliar with them, so there is a problem every time.
>> CORRECT!

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