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1. What was it?
1. **I was interested in science subjects since it made me focus**
2. Who did you do it with?
1. **I did it Just only myself since I didn¡¯t need any other¡¯s help especialy my friends. So sometimes I made some stupid answers.**
3. How often did you do this activity?
1. **The activity involves science subjects, so I participated as much as I could.**
4. Explain why you realy enjoyed doing it before.
1. **I think I¡¯m suited person at science field. Besides I¡¯m working in that field.**

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Hi Jeong,
It was nice reading your composition. Next time try to write as if you are writing an essay and not just simply answering the guide questions given to you. 
Do not limit yourself to adding more to your composition :)
~ T. Demi ^^


I was interested in science subjects since it made me focus.
CORRECT!
OR>> I have been interested in science subjects because they make me focus.

I did it Just only myself since I didn¡¯t need any other¡¯s help especialy my friends. So sometimes I made some stupid answers.
>> I did it by myself since I didn't need any help from my friends. So sometimes I make some errors.
The activity involves science subjects, so I participated as much as I could.
>> This activity involves science experiments so I participated as much as I could.
I think I¡¯m suited person at science field. Besides I¡¯m working in that field.
>> I think I'm suited to the science field considering I'm working in that field now.

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