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I start studying english because of self-improvement. Through this class, I can get self-efficacy by speaking english well gradually. Also my teacher Sharon will make me keep studying gladly. I will put the work in this!

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Hi Joon Hee!
Thank you for your composition today.
Please take note of the suggestions  below.
If you have any questions, feel free to ask in class.
Good job and keep it up!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I start studying english because of self-improvement. 
>> I started studying English for self-improvement. 
Through this class, I can get self-efficacy by speaking english well gradually. 
>> Through this class, I can achieve self-efficacy by gradually practicing my English speaking skills. 
Also my teacher Sharon will make me keep studying gladly. 
>> Also, Teacher Sharon can make the class interesting for me. 
I will put the work in this!
>> I will really put in my best effort!
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