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Why I think peer pressure is harmful

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As you see the word ¡®peer pressure¡¯ has a literal negative word ¡®pressure¡¯. Literally, peers can press their friends to do something against his will. Especially, youth can be so influenced by or susceptible to close friends that their influence can work as pressure to peers, such as bullying or ostracizing particular one. I think good behavior should be encouraged, not pressed by others. Therefore, as the old saying goes, birds in a feather flocks together. If someone wants to be under a good influence, he or she should be careful with friends around him or her.

Adolescent peer pressure began to enter the scene a few years ago when a great of information started to be shared through the SNS or Youtube. Youth can get a crude information which should be screened out because it can be detrimental to mind. Youth can follow a suit of behaviors in violent movies without thinking about it. Their peer pressure presses their friends to do something bad that good things.

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Hi Steve,

Thanks for sharing your thoughts on this. I agree with your opinion on this. Well done!

-Teacher Ash. 

As you see the word ¡®peer pressure¡¯ has a literal negative word ¡®pressure¡¯. 
>> As you can see the word ¡®peer pressure¡¯ has a negative word ¡®pressure¡¯. 

Literally, peers can press their friends to do something against his will. 
>> Literally, peers can press their friends to do something against their will. 

Especially, youth can be so influenced by or susceptible to close friends that their influence can work as pressure to peers, such as bullying or ostracizing particular one.
>> Especially youth nowadays are easily influenced by their close friends, especially when they are being bullied or ostracize. 

 I think good behavior should be encouraged, not pressed by others. 
>> CORRECT

Therefore, as the old saying goes, birds in a feather flocks together. 
>> Therefore, as the old saying goes, birds with the same feather flocks together. 

If someone wants to be under a good influence, he or she should be careful with friends around him or her.
>>If someone wishes to be influenced positively, they should exercise caution with the friends they surround themselves with.

Adolescent peer pressure began to enter the scene a few years ago when a great of information started to be shared through the SNS or Youtube. 
>>Peer pressure among the young people began a few years ago when information is shared through SNS and YouTube. 

Youth can get a crude information which should be screened out because it can be detrimental to mind. 
>> Information for young people should be filtered because it can be detrimental to their minds.

Youth can follow a suit of behaviors in violent movies without thinking about it. 
>> They can follow bad behaviors in violent movies without thinking about the consequence. 

Their peer pressure presses their friends to do something bad that good things.
>> These pressures push them to do bad things instead of choosing to do good.  
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