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What are some popular sweets in your culture?

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2024-05-06 649

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Korean people still adhere to their traditions when it comes to main dishes in their food culture.
Korean people cannot stand it without eating rice, kimchi, and various soups at least once.
Koreans must take kimchi and red pepper paste with them when traveling abroad, and even Koreans who have immigrated to other countries for decades still stick to rice, kimchi, and soup.
However, in Korea, sweets have already become Westernized.
Therefore, not only young Koreans but also older Koreans like various sweets from the West.
Cakes, pancakes, cupcakes, croissants, pies, waffles, etc.
However, Korea's traditional sweets are still popular.
Koreans enjoy eating Rice cakes, Snacks made by mixing honey and flour, Pumpkin taffy made from pumpkin, SIKHYE, a sweet drink made from barley and rice, and SUJEONGGWA, a drink made by mixing ginger, cinnamon, and honey.
Korea's traditional sweets are especially popular among foreigners traveling to Korea.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello there, Sun! 

Did you know that sweets release dopamine? It happens in the nucleus accumbens, which is the part of your brain linked to reward, novelty, and motivation. Dopamine is an important neurotransmitter that plays a key role in controlling emotional responses.

- Kristine ^^ 

Korean people still adhere to their traditions when it comes to main dishes in their food culture.
>> Correct.
Korean people cannot stand it without eating rice, kimchi, and various soups at least once.
>> Correct.
Koreans must take kimchi and red pepper paste with them when traveling abroad, and even Koreans who have immigrated to other countries for decades still stick to rice, kimchi, and soup.
>> When traveling overseas, Koreans always bring kimchi and red pepper paste, and even after decades of immigration, they still only eat rice, kimchi, and soup.
However, in Korea, sweets have already become Westernized.
>> Correct.
Therefore, not only young Koreans but also older Koreans like various sweets from the West.
>> Therefore, older Koreans as well as younger Koreans enjoy a variety of Western delicacies.
Cakes, pancakes, cupcakes, croissants, pies, waffles, etc.
>> Correct.
However, Korea's traditional sweets are still popular.
>> Correct.
Koreans enjoy eating Rice cakes, Snacks made by mixing honey and flour, Pumpkin taffy made from pumpkin, SIKHYE, a sweet drink made from barley and rice, and SUJEONGGWA, a drink made by mixing ginger, cinnamon, and honey.
>> Koreans are fond of rice cakes, which are treats produced by combining flour and honey, as well as pumpkin taffy, sikheye, a sweet beverage composed of rice and barley, and sujeonggwa, a beverage consisting of honey, ginger, and cinnamon.
Korea's traditional sweets are especially popular among foreigners traveling to Korea.
>> Traditional Korean sweets are particularly popular by tourists from other countries.
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