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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Are you interested in interior design? How important is the style or appearance of the inside of a home?

The interior design is sensitive to fashion.
So we have a lot of parts to consider when we do the interior design.
In my country interior trends design is "minimalism" in now days.
This design is when we do decorate our's house, not displaying many items like picture frames and plant pot.
In other words, many people prefer a simple and practical design.
There are many reason why those design trends in these days.
One of the reason, these days is too much information.
It's means that we usually get too much information, and easily feel tired.
But, home(house) is rest place and provides us with comfort.
Therefore, minimalist design is trend because they want to reduce this stress and tired.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Are you interested in interior design? How important is the style or appearance of the inside of a home?


The interior design is sensitive to fashion.
>> Interior designing is a sensitive thing in fashion.
So we have a lot of parts to consider when we do the interior design.
>> CORRECT!
In my country interior trends design is "minimalism" in now days.
>> In my country nowadays, the interior design trend is "minimalism".
This design is when we do decorate our's house, not displaying many items like picture frames and plant pot.
>> This design is when we decorate our house, but not displaying many items like picture frames and plant pots.
In other words, many people prefer a simple and practical design.
>> CORRECT!
There are many reason why those design trends in these days.
>> There are many reasons why that design became a trend these days.
One of the reason, these days is too much information.
>> One of the reason these days is too much information.
It's means that we usually get too much information, and easily feel tired.
>> It means that we usually get too much information, and easily feel tired.
But, home (house) is a rest place and provides us with comfort.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Our home is a resting place that provides us comfort.
Therefore, minimalist design is trend because they want to reduce this stress and tired.
>> Therefore, minimalist design is a trend because they want to reduce this stress and tiredness.

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