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I think parents have to respect their children's privacy because I think not respecting privacy means not giving freedom. If parents don't give freedom to their children they will be angry to their parents.

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Hello, Henry! That's a valid point. Respecting children's privacy is crucial for fostering trust and independence. It allows them to feel valued and encourages open communication with parents.
~ Teacher Maxine 

I think parents have to respect their children's privacy because I think not respecting privacy means not giving freedom. 
>> CORRECT
OR >> I believe parents should respect their children's privacy because failing to do so can impede their sense of freedom.

If parents don't give freedom to their children they will be angry to their parents.
>> When children feel their privacy is not respected, it may lead to resentment towards their parents.
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