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What do you think of the rainy season? How do you feel when it rains.

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I hate the rainy season, because I don't like the feeling of wet and sticky.
And it's uncomfortable to bring my umbrela.
But I love to hear raindrops inside.

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                     What do you think of the rainy season? How do you feel when it rains?


I hate the rainy season, because I don't like the feeling of wet and sticky.
>> I hate the rainy season because I don't like the feeling of getting wet and sticky.
>> OR: I hate the rainy season because I don't like getting wet and sweaty. 

And it's uncomfortable to bring my umbrela.
>> And it's uncomfortable to bring my umbrella. 
>> OR: Also, it's bothersome to bring an umbrella when I go out. 

But I love to hear raindrops inside.
>> But I love to hear the sound of raindrops or the rain inside.

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