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What are the pros and cons of rock climbing to keep fit and healthy?

작성자: 박*호
2024-04-30 515

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It seems that the number of people who climb rocks to maintain their body or stay healthy is increasing.
Recently, not only outdoor rock climbing but also indoor rock climbing seems to be becoming a sport.
I have never personally tried rock climbing, so I will talk about the pros and cons based on what I have read about it.
First, let me talk about the pros.
First, it is an exercise that is not boring.
Rock climbing can be enjoyed just like a game.
Second, it is a full body exercise.
It is a balanced exercise that uses the muscles of the entire body, including the arms, legs, back, and abdomen.
Third, it is good for mental health.
Rock climbing relieves stress and gives you a sense of accomplishment.
Next, I will talk about the cons.
First, there is a high risk of injury.
When rock climbing, you may fall from a high place.
Second, you must give up beauty of hands.
When you climb, you often get cuts or scars on your hands.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Sun! 

Climbing is a full-body exercise: You'll use your upper body, core, and lower body, and will especially work your pulling muscles, including your biceps, wrist flexors, and back muscles. You'll even use those in your fingers and feet.

- Kristine ^^ 

It seems that the number of people who climb rocks to maintain their body or stay healthy is increasing.
>> It seems that the number of people who climb rocks to maintain their bodies or stay healthy is increasing.
Recently, not only outdoor rock climbing but also indoor rock climbing seems to be becoming a sport.
>> It appears that indoor and outdoor rock climbing are growing in popularity as sports recently.
I have never personally tried rock climbing, so I will talk about the pros and cons based on what I have read about it.
>> Since I haven't experienced rock climbing myself, I will discuss its pros and cons based on what I have read.
First, let me talk about the pros.
>> Correct. 
First, it is an exercise that is not boring.
>> It is an exercise that is entertaining, to start.
Rock climbing can be enjoyed just like a game.
>> You can enjoy rock climbing in the same way as playing a game.
Second, it is a full body exercise.
>> Second, it is a full-body exercise.
It is a balanced exercise that uses the muscles of the entire body, including the arms, legs, back, and abdomen.
>> Correct. 
Third, it is good for mental health.
>> Correct. 
Rock climbing relieves stress and gives you a sense of accomplishment.
>> Correct. 
Next, I will talk about the cons.
>> Correct. 
First, there is a high risk of injury.
>> To begin with, the risk of injury is significant.
When rock climbing, you may fall from a high place.
>> You run the risk of falling from a height when rock climbing.
Second, you must give up beauty of hands.
>> Secondly, you have to forfeit your hand's beauty.
When you climb, you often get cuts or scars on your hands.
>> Correct. 
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