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While leading a content planning club, I gained valuable experience in advancing projects through extensive feedback. During my university years, I co-founded a classic literature content planning club with classmates. We selected classic literature and reimagined it in various content formats, actively exchanging ideas and feedback during adaptation and content planning stages. By acquiring perspectives and opinions from others, not just my own, I was able to produce increasingly improved results. Additionally, both during the content planning stages and in my current job, I frequently request feedback on work methods, processes, and outcomes. I believe that feedback and criticism from those with more experience than myself can clearly identify areas for improvement, ultimately increasing work efficiency. To make projects productive and achieve the best results, I consider feedback and criticism in creative collaboration processes essential.

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Hello, Eugene! Your message effectively communicates your experience and approach to feedback-driven collaboration. Keep up the good work!
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While leading a content planning club, I gained valuable experience in advancing projects through extensive feedback. 
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During my university years, I co-founded a classic literature content planning club with classmates. 
>> CORRECT

We selected classic literature and reimagined it in various content formats, actively exchanging ideas and feedback during adaptation and content planning stages. 
>> CORRECT

By acquiring perspectives and opinions from others, not just my own, I was able to produce increasingly improved results. 
>> CORRECT
OR >> By seeking perspectives and opinions from diverse sources, I cultivated an environment conducive to producing increasingly refined results.

Additionally, both during the content planning stages and in my current job, I frequently request feedback on work methods, processes, and outcomes. 
>> CORRECT
OR >> Furthermore, both during the content planning stages and in my current role, I actively seek feedback on work methods, processes, and outcomes.

I believe that feedback and criticism from those with more experience than myself can clearly identify areas for improvement, ultimately increasing work efficiency. 
>> CORRECT
OR  >> I firmly believe that constructive feedback and criticism, particularly from those with more experience, are invaluable in pinpointing areas for improvement and enhancing work efficiency.

To make projects productive and achieve the best results, I consider feedback and criticism in creative collaboration processes essential.
>> CORRECT

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