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Q: What kinds of problems does alcohol cause?
A: I think it can cause both mental problems, and physical health problems.
If a person is addicted to alcohol too much, then that person will always think about alcohol, and that will affect his or her life.
Also, drinking too much can cause some problems in body especially to liver.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework!

~T. Divina^^

Here are some things to consider:

1. I think it can cause both mental problems, and physical health problems.
>>I think it can cause both mental and physical health problems.

2. If a person is addicted to alcohol too much, then that person will always think about alcohol, and that will affect his or her life.
>>If a person is too addicted to alcohol, then that person will always think about alcohol, and that will affect his or her life.

3. Also, drinking too much can cause some problems in body especially to liver.
>>Also, drinking too much can cause some problems in the body, especially to the liver.

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