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Have you ever had to save anyone from drowning? Would you know what to do?

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2024-04-29 312

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Fortunately, I have never seen a drowning person in person, and so have never tried to save them.
When I was in elementary school, I remember hearing that on a rainy day, the reservoir overflowed and a young student on his way to school drowned and died.
Although I have no experience rescuing a drowning person, I was trained as an officer in the military and know how to rescue a drowning person.
First, you should not jump in hastily to rescue a drowning person, but should throw anything that floats in the water, such as a lifebelt, life jacket, or tree, that is nearby.
Next, you must request rescue from the police, fire department, and people around you.
And if the situation is very urgent and you are a very good swimmer, jump into the water and grab the drowning person from behind.
If you approach the drowning person in front, the person may grab you and you may not be able to swim.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good afternoon, Sun!

When someone has been drowning, their lungs may be full of the liquid they were in. In this situation, giving rescue breaths is especially important to provide them with oxygen. In this situation, they may become responsive again once the liquid is removed form their lungs.

- Kristine ^^ 

Fortunately, I have never seen a drowning person in person, and so have never tried to save them.
>> Fortunately, I have never witnessed someone drowning and have never attempted to save them.
When I was in elementary school, I remember hearing that on a rainy day, the reservoir overflowed and a young student on his way to school drowned and died.
>> I was told, back in elementary school, that a young student was drowned and died when the reservoir overflowed.
Although I have no experience rescuing a drowning person, I was trained as an officer in the military and know how to rescue a drowning person.
>> Despite the fact that I haven't personally saved a drowning person, I'm aware of how to do so because I attended military training.
First, you should not jump in hastily to rescue a drowning person, but should throw anything that floats in the water, such as a lifebelt, life jacket, or tree, that is nearby.
>> First, if you see someone drowning, don't rush to their aid; instead, toss anything that floats in the water—a branch of tree, a lifebelt, or anything else that could be close by.
Next, you must request rescue from the police, fire department, and people around you.
>> The next step is to ask for help from the fire department, police, and other people around you.
And if the situation is very urgent and you are a very good swimmer, jump into the water and grab the drowning person from behind.
>> Additionally, if you are an excellent swimmer and the situation is extremely urgent, dive into the water and save the drowning person from behind.
If you approach the drowning person in front, the person may grab you and you may not be able to swim.
>> Approaching the person who is drowning from the front could cause them to grab you, and making it impossible for you to swim.
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