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Was there a time that you lacked sleep and food?

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2024-04-29 2004

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There was a time I lacked both sleep and food when I was working as a catering chef.
My department was lacked of staffs, so only three people had to take care a lot of portions of food and had to decorate venue too.
When we had huge banquet and if other banquet was scheduled on same week, we finish work in the late of night and go work early in the morning, sometimes 4AM.
At that time, my eyes were red and had bags under my eyes, even though I cooked, I didn't want to eat and even looked the foods at all.
Just want to lay down on my bed.

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Hi there again, Rachel! 

The most important advantage of being a chef is that there are almost unlimited employment opportunities. Time is everything when you are in the kitchen. If it is a busy day with lots of customers, being efficient while still putting out and cooking quality dishes in a timely manner is crucial to a restaurant's success. 

I am proud of your dedication to your work and service in spite of the lack of sleep and food. Your experience is so valuable and worthy of respect.

It is so nice to see you here on the composition page once again. You wrote long and very meaningful sentences with very slight grammar suggestions. Study them well below.

See you again in class!

-T. Donna~

There was a time I lacked both sleep and food when I was working as a catering chef.
>> Correct!

My department was lacked of staffs, so only three people had to take care a lot of portions of food and had to decorate venue too.
>> My department lacked staff, so only three people had to take care of a lot of portions of food and had to decorate the venue too.

When we had huge banquet and if other banquet was scheduled on same week, we finish work in the late of night and go work early in the morning, sometimes 4AM.
>>When we had a huge banquet and if the other banquet was scheduled on the same week, we finish work late at night and go work early in the morning, sometimes 4AM.

At that time, my eyes were red and had bags under my eyes, even though I cooked, I didn't want to eat and even looked the foods at all.
>>At that time, my eyes were red and had bags under my eyes, even though I cooked, I didn't want to eat and even looked at the foods at all.

Just want to lay down on my bed.
>> I just wanted to lay down on my bed.
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