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2024-04-29 977

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The resort where my family visited was opened last year so, everything was new. It's a huge place because they have three big buildings. Our purpose was having dinner at restaurant and go to the water park. We waited 2 hours while looking around the restaurant until open. They have many kinds of food especially eastern Asia. What i ate first was Sushi of Japanese part and next part was grilled part. There are beef,lamb,pork and chicken so, i treid everything in small amounts. At that time, i already fulled. But i found my favorite food Malatang of Chinese part so, i had to tried it. Finally i ate that and i thought should swim and digest it. So we went straight to water park. I was really looking forward to water slides but it wasn't opened yet. There's only a lazy pool what we could enjoy. We enterd the lazy pool with a tube provided at resort. And swam without a break for 2 hours to digest. I thought we enjoyed 100% of resort. I want to go again.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Yoon Hee,


Thanks for sharing a detailed narrative of your time with your family. I think it would be really awesome for you to visit again in summer. Speak to you later! ^^

- Teacher Ash


The resort where my family visited was opened last year so, everything was new.

>> CORRECT


 It's a huge place because they have three big buildings.

>>CORRECT


 Our purpose was having dinner at restaurant and go to the water park.

>>Our plan was to have dinner and go to the waterpark.


 We waited 2 hours while looking around the restaurant until open. 

>> We waited for two hours, while looking around the restaurant, until the waterpark opens. 


They have many kinds of food especially eastern Asia.

>> They have many kinds of food especially East Asian. 


 What i ate first was Sushi of Japanese part and next part was grilled part. 

>> I ate Japanese sushi, then I also tasted the grilled one. 


There are beef,lamb,pork and chicken so, i treid everything in small amounts.

>>They also have beef, lamb, pork and chicken so, I tried everything in small amount.


 At that time, i already fulled.

>> At that time, I was already full. 


 But i found my favorite food Malatang of Chinese part so, i had to tried it.

>> However, I found my favorite food, Malatang, a Chinese food. So, I had to try it. 


 Finally i ate that and i thought should swim and digest it. 

>> After finally eating all that, I thought I should swim to help digest all I’ve eaten.

 

So we went straight to water park.

>> So, we went straight to the waterpark. 


 I was really looking forward to water slides but it wasn't opened yet.

>> I was really looking forward to the water slides, but it was not yet opened. 


 There's only a lazy pool what we could enjoy.

>> There’s only the lazy pool that we could enjoy. 


 We enterd the lazy pool with a tube provided at resort.

>> We tried the lazy pool with lifesavers or floaties given to us by the staff. 


 And swam without a break for 2 hours to digest.

>> We swam to hours without a break which helped digest what we have eaten. 


 I thought we enjoyed 100% of resort.

>> I definitely,100%, enjoyed the resort experience.  


 I want to go again.

>>CORRECT
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