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benefits of eating raw meat

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In my opinion there are some benefits of eating raw meat. First of all, tastes are good. what we need more reason to eat.
I love that textures and temperature. I enjoy to eat cool and cold food. Secondly, The raw meat are healthy food. We use and pick the special part of beef less the fat part. So there are enough protein, good and balanced nutrients.

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Hi, Sir Thomas!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


In my opinion there are some benefits of eating raw meat. 
>> CORRECT!
First of all, tastes are good. 
>> First of all, it tastes good. 
OR >> First of all, it's tasty.
what we need more reason to eat.
>> There are more reasons to eat it.
I love that textures and temperature. 
>> I love the texture and temperature. 
I enjoy to eat cool and cold food. 
>> I enjoy eating cold food. 
Secondly, The raw meat are healthy food. 
>> Secondly, raw meat is a healthy food. 
We use and pick the special part of beef less the fat part. 
>> We use and pick the special part of the beef which is the less fatty part. 
So there are enough proteins, good and balanced nutrients.
>> CORRECT!

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