¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

benefits of eating raw meat

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÃÖ*ȯ
2024-04-26 311

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

In my opinion there are some benefits of eating raw meat. First of all, tastes are good. what we need more reason to eat.
I love that textures and temperature. I enjoy to eat cool and cold food. Secondly, The raw meat are healthy food. We use and pick the special part of beef less the fat part. So there are enough protein, good and balanced nutrients.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi, Sir Thomas!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


In my opinion there are some benefits of eating raw meat. 
>> CORRECT!
First of all, tastes are good. 
>> First of all, it tastes good. 
OR >> First of all, it's tasty.
what we need more reason to eat.
>> There are more reasons to eat it.
I love that textures and temperature. 
>> I love the texture and temperature. 
I enjoy to eat cool and cold food. 
>> I enjoy eating cold food. 
Secondly, The raw meat are healthy food. 
>> Secondly, raw meat is a healthy food. 
We use and pick the special part of beef less the fat part. 
>> We use and pick the special part of the beef which is the less fatty part. 
So there are enough proteins, good and balanced nutrients.
>> CORRECT!

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
137246 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-05-17 307
137245 In your own opinion, why do you think some people don\'t like... ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2024-05-17 305
137244 What types of leisure activities are popular in your country? ±è*ȯ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-17 403
137243 TV series ÀÌ*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-05-17 298
137242 homework ÀÌ*¼ö ¿Ï·á 2024-05-17 247
137241 2024-05-16 ³²*·Ê ¿Ï·á 2024-05-17 198
137240 What strategies do you use to stay motivated in the morning? ¹Ú*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-17 413
137239 lie detection test ÀÌ*³ë ¿Ï·á 2024-05-17 326
137238 What would be the impact of a \"global internet failure\" for... ±è*¿í ¿Ï·á 2024-05-17 220
137237 Are people more polite with non-family members than they are... ¿À*¼Ò ¿Ï·á 2024-05-17 0
137236 Page.15 ±è*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-05-17 1
137235 Homework Àå*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-16 784
137234 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-05-16 1
137233 do you prefer the mountains or the beach? ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-05-16 428
137232 Homework È«*¼± ¿Ï·á 2024-05-16 1
137231 What do you think of Korean men serving in the military? Â÷*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-16 274
137230 What are the most expensive fruits in Korea? Do you think they... Â÷*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-05-16 306
137229 a new sports stadium ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-16 1
137228 homework 05.16 ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2024-05-16 501
137227 What are the things you never do? Write at least two and explain... Â÷*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-16 344

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04