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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
In your opinion, are insect bites severely dangerous?

It's common to stung or bites by insects(bugs).
Usually we will be feel itchy or little pain, but it's not dangerous our life.
But, I think it is very dangerous for some people's health.
I heard this story to many times.
It's "Among the insect that killed the most people is the mosquito."
Historically, the mosquitoes has spread diseases and killed to people.
Next, in another example, some people can be easily die even if they are stung by honeybees.
Usually, when normal people stung by a bee, they are get itchy or little swollen.
But, it will be dangerous if who have bee allergies get stung by bee.
Because, worst case, their body will be shocked.
But, most people doesn't know well if they are have allergic.
So we try to avoid bugs places or apply insect repellent to our body.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
In your opinion, are insect bites severely dangerous?


It's common to stung or bites by insects(bugs).
>> It's common to be stung or be bitten by insects (bugs).
Usually we will be feel itchy or little pain, but it's not dangerous our life.
>> Usually, we may feel an itch or a little pain, but it's not dangerous to our lives.
But, I think it is very dangerous for some people's health.
>> CORRECT!
I heard this story to many times.
>> I have heard this story many times.
It's "Among the insect that killed the most people is the mosquito."
>> It's "Among the insects that killed the most people, is the mosquito."
Historically, the mosquitoes has spread diseases and killed to people.
>> Historically, the mosquitoes have spread diseases and killed many people.
Next, in another example, some people can be easily die even if they are stung by honeybees.
>> Next, in another example, some people can easily die even if they are stung by honeybees.
Usually, when normal people stung by a bee, they are get itchy or little swollen.
>> Usually, when normal people get stung by a bee, they get itchy or little swollen.
But, it will be dangerous if who have bee allergies get stung by bee.
>> But, it will be dangerous to whoever has bee allergies when they get stung by bee.
Because, in worst cases, their body will be shocked.
>> CORRECT!
But, most people doesn't know well if they are have allergic.
>> But, most people don't know it well if they are allergic to it.
So we try to avoid bugs places or apply insect repellent to our body.
>> So we try to avoid places with many bugs or apply insect repellent to our body.

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