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Playing a claw machine game is the best way to relieve stress.

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Claw machine game is one of my hobbies since I was twenty. Even though I often get rid of stress by working out, I choose to relieve excessive stress by doing the claw machine game over exercising.

People get addicted to this game not because of the prize, which would be a big doll, an airpod, a fancy lighter, etc. It's because of progress and the ecstasy when the doll comes out. I don't recommend to play this often because it is a hobby that makes people overspend. Even so, people only think about getting the doll when they play this game which is the best way to get away from the reality once in a while.

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Jin, it is one of my favorite pastimes, too ^___^ 
I enjoy playing basketball at the arcade as well, it helps me relieve stress. Indeed, it can be somewhat addictive, leading to excessive spending... Therefore, we must exercise caution when engaging in these activities. :))
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Claw machine game is one of my hobbies since I was twenty. 
>> Claw machine game has been one of my hobbies since I was twenty. 
Even though I often get rid of stress by working out, I choose to relieve excessive stress by doing the claw machine game over-exercising.
>> Correct
People get addicted to this game not because of the prize, which would be a big doll, an airpod, a fancy lighter, etc. It's because of progress and the ecstasy when the doll comes out.
>> Correct
 I don't recommend to play this often because it is a hobby that makes people overspend. 
>>  I don't recommend playing this often because it is a hobby that makes people overspend.
Even so, people only think about getting the doll when they play this game which is the best way to get away from the reality once in a while.
>> Correct
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