무료 레벨테스트 받고 강사평가 남기면 1,OOO원 쿠폰 즉시 적립!

혹시 사이트에선 찾지 못한 궁금한 점이 있으세요?
남겨주신 이메일을 통해 답변 드리겠습니다.

문의하신 내용이 문자로 발송되오니
연락처를 남겨주세요.
업무시간 월~금 오전9시~오후6시
(점심시간 낮12시~오후1시)

영작교정 게시판

영어 말하기와 쓰기를 동시에 잡는다!

자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
회원님들께 무료로 제공해드리는 부가 서비스로, 전문 분야를 제외한 자유 주제
또는 강사님이 내주시는 과제를 회원님께서 영어로 작성해주시면,
담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

What preparation in general do you need to have before attempting extreme sports?

작성자: 박*호
2024-04-26 1914

회원님의 영작문

Extreme sports are very dangerous and can cause serious injury and, in extreme cases, death.
Bungee jumping, paragliding, bare-handed rock climbing, snowboarding, water skiing, and skydiving are well known to people.
I've never tried it before because I'm scared, but the number of people around me who enjoy extreme sports is increasing.
However, the number of cases of people getting seriously injured or even dying while enjoying extreme sports is increasing.
Therefore, you need to be very careful before attempting extreme sports.
If you are trying the sport, I would give the following advice:
First, you need to consult with an extreme sports expert in advance to choose a sport that suits you well.
Second, after selecting a sport, you must receive sufficient training under the guidance of an expert.
Third, you must have sufficient equipment appropriate for the event.
Fourth, when attempting a sport, you must do so under the guidance of an expert.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Friday, Sun! 

Extreme sports require you to be strong but also lean so you can move fast. Focus your training on programs that build form as opposed to bulk. Adding the right strength training regiment to your plan will also help reduce the risk of injury. Structured programs like performance training fit that bill perfectly.

- Kristine ^^ 

Extreme sports are very dangerous and can cause serious injury and, in extreme cases, death.
>> Correct. 
Bungee jumping, paragliding, bare-handed rock climbing, snowboarding, water skiing, and skydiving are well known to people.
>> Correct. 
I've never tried it before because I'm scared, but the number of people around me who enjoy extreme sports is increasing.
>> Correct. 
However, the number of cases of people getting seriously injured or even dying while enjoying extreme sports is increasing.
>> However, there are a growing number of incidents where participants in extreme sports suffer life-threatening injuries or even die.
Therefore, you need to be very careful before attempting extreme sports.
>> Correct. 
If you are trying the sport, I would give the following advice:
>> I would recommend the following tips for you if your decide to try extreme sports:
First, you need to consult with an extreme sports expert in advance to choose a sport that suits you well.
>> Correct. 
Second, after selecting a sport, you must receive sufficient training under the guidance of an expert.
>> Second, once you've chosen a sport, you need to train hard enough under the supervision of a professional.
Third, you must have sufficient equipment appropriate for the event.
>> Correct. 
Fourth, when attempting a sport, you must do so under the guidance of an expert.
>> Correct. 
번호 제목 글쓴이 공개 상태 등록일 조회수
133991 Homework 김*훈 완료 2024-01-18 1438
133990 I love eating delicious foods with my family 김*민 완료 2024-01-18 1981
133989 homework 박*혜 완료 2024-01-18 1045
133988 Homework 김*님 완료 2024-01-18 1215
133987 Do you think women should do compulsory military service too? 김*규 완료 2024-01-18 1
133986 homework 01.17 최*� 완료 2024-01-17 1205
133985 Homework 장*혁 완료 2024-01-17 1270
133984 What would you do if you had a few extra hours in a day? 권*임 완료 2024-01-17 1
133983 Aside from diet and exercise, what are some ways to keep... 황*은 완료 2024-01-17 1251
133982 Is it better to talk about and share opinions or keep them to... 윤*원 완료 2024-01-17 0
133981 Homework 김*우 완료 2024-01-17 385
133980 homework 이*숙 완료 2024-01-17 1893
133979 Homework 김*서 완료 2024-01-17 2
133978 Cathedral 이*규 완료 2024-01-17 1293
133977 All learning is worth it, and it feels good to be able to fill... 윤*혜 완료 2024-01-17 1373
133976 About my job in the future 김*우 완료 2024-01-17 0
133975 Homework 신*화 완료 2024-01-17 1335
133974 What would you plant if you had a big garden? 박*현 완료 2024-01-17 1543
133973 레스토랑 선택 황*혜 완료 2024-01-17 1142
133972 If you were left on a deserted island with either your worst... 에*미 완료 2024-01-17 2

HOW TO USE IT?

[마이페이지 > 수업 내용 보기 > 학습 캘린더 > 영작교정 버튼 클릭]

수업 횟수만큼 영작교정 게시판이 생성되며,
지난 날짜에도 게시 할 수 있습니다.

주5회 수업 : 월 20회 이용 가능
주3회 수업 : 월 12회 이용 가능
주2회 수업 : 월 08회 이용 가능
01
교정 내용은 최대 1,000byte까지 올릴 수 있습니다.

첨부 파일은 원활한 첨삭을 위한 참고자료로 사용될 뿐,
파일에 대한 첨삭은 불가능 합니다.

업로드 가능한 첨부 파일은 최대 2mb까지이며,
첨부 할 수 있는 파일 형식은 다음과 같습니다.

문서 - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
이미지 - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
전문 분야를 제외한 회원님이 직접 작성한 글만
첨삭이 가능하며,

올려주신 글의 강사님 첨삭은 24시간 이내에
완료 되는 것을 원칙으로 하고 있습니다.
03
하루 게시 가능한 글은 3회까지 이며,
종료된 수업의 영작교정 게시판은
이용이 어려운 점 양해 부탁 드립니다.
04

와이즈에듀케이션아이(주) 사이트명: 파워잉글리쉬 대표이사 전상현
사업자등록번호: 217-81-44736 통신판매신고번호: 2014-서울도봉-0233호
서울본사: 서울시 노원구 한글비석로 245 두타빌 B동 7층 713호
대표번호 1688-8672 개인정보관리 책임자: 안희영 [powerenglish@pweng.net]